Louis Barca

[Walt]

Name: Louis (LOO-wis) Barca

Age: 16 Birth Date: 29 Sep 1998

Divine Ancestry: Son of Bellona

Mortal Family: Julio Barca(father)

Years in Camp: 1.5

Rank: Legionnaire

History: Louis Barca's father, Julio, met Bellona as a soldier in the Cuban military while on vacation in America. He immediately fell in love, and retired from the military and moved to Miami shortly before Louis was born, hoping that he'd have a better life there than in Cuba. For the most part, he did. Louis maintained average grades in school, and played soccer every year up until he turned 14. Right after his first day of high school, he returned to his home to find his house burned to ashes. He went to look for his father, but instead found a cyclops imitating his voice. Louis ran away as fast he could, and never went back. A few days later, he was found by Lupa and brought to the Wolf House for training. Louis passed the She-Wolf's tests and was sent to Camp Jupiter to join the 12th Legion. He picked up on the formations quickly, and over the year and a half since his arrival, Louis has become very skilled at swordplay and archery, though he prefers his sword.

Physical Appearance: Louis has light, caramel colored skin. He's lean, muscular, and about 6'0 tall. He has short, messy black hair, his face is clean-shaven, and he has  He usually wears a sleeveless grey t-shirt (with a black leather bomber jacket when it gets cold), black jeans, and a pair of sneakers.

Personality: Louis is a thinking man's soldier. Before any engagement, he formulates a plan of attack, and thoroughly briefs the rest of his men on it. Even mid-battle, Louis is always studying patterns, looking for weaknesses to exploit. He wants to be the guy in charge, giving the orders, and getting the glory. However, this leads to him being a little too competitive, to a point where his addiction to winning is a bit off-putting. In Louis' limited social experience, he hasn't really been one to have a lot of people around him. He has a handful of good friends who he keeps around, and that's usually about it.

Fatal Flaw: Louis' fatal flaw is headstrongness. This more often than not leads to him biting off more than he can chew, and he's paid for it on numerous occasions. He will often disregard dissenting strategic advice because he thinks he always knows more than everyone else. Louis is the kind of guy that does all the work on a project himself regardless of how skilled the other group members are, simply because he KNOWS he can get it done faster his way. 2 weeks later, when the project is due, Louis still hasn't finished, nor has he eaten or slept since he started working. If he'd accepted the help of the others, the whole thing would've been finished, proofread, and published in half the time.

Talents: Louis is a naturally gifted strategist, and is adept in both armed and unarmed combat. With his father's military background, Louis also picked up a thing or two about camping, hunting, and surviving off of few resources. His training at Camp Jupiter made Louis a decent cavalryman, but he prefers being in the infantry.

Weapons: A 2.5' Imperial Gold Celt-Iberian falcata that transforms into a carabiner keychain

Other: Louis likes spicy food, and he loves studying old battles like Marathon, Zama, Stalingrad, San Jacinto, Waterloo, etc. Louis also speaks Spanish and English with equal fluency, and can play the guitar.

[Axel The Bunny]

Your personality is not a list of likes and dislikes, from what i can make of it so far it seems you are competitive, and has not many friends. The personality is how your character normally is. Does he charge into battle, or strategize. Is he reckless and impulsive or cold and calculating. This should give me an idea of who your character is.

Also how exactly did Bellona meet with his father in the first place, since gods rarely leave the states, this is mentioned in the books, and the reason that the books don't mention any international demigods. while demigods may show up in places connected to North America such as Canada or Mexico, it would be rare for them to travel all the way to Spain. It might be possible if the conception of the child actually happens in the states, but it seems unfair to the books otherwise.

[Walt]

How's this?

[Axel The Bunny]

Does the cuban military allow their soldiers to vacation in America, im pretty sure they're government hates us, and doesn't allow for vacations in the states, but oh well, maybe they were working with an embassy or something.

Also you need to relate your fatal flaw to your personality. also your fatal flaw sounds like a mix of stubbornness. arrogance, and a distrust in others. please clarify what it is, the fatal flaw is essentially a single personality trait that is blotted to the point it can be a detriment to the character.

For example, Jake for example is stubborn to a fault, to the point where he can get so involved in a project he forgets essential things like eating or sleeping.

try to clear up what your fatal flaw is for me please, fix that stuff and you should be good. you could maybe add alot of what is in FF to personality as well.

[Walt]

The fatal flaw is arrogance, sorry for any confusion.

Also, Cuban and US relations are a lot more lax now. We still hate each other, but Cubans and Americans can come and go as they please (with the right papers, of course). I can change the country if that helps, I'm just picking a random Latin country in the Caribbean.

[Axel The Bunny]

Alright then it looks pretty good to me then, thank you for your patience, I'm gonna go ahead and say approved, wait for a day or so before posting anything though. If Jake doesnt have any complaints about the app, then your good.

[Walt]

No problem, I'm still new to RP so I'll take all the constructive criticism I can get I can get

[Axel The Bunny]

I remember the feeling, Lawl you get through that, I started RP last year and am hooked on it xP If you have any questions feel free to PM me or catch me in the chatbox, I can also be found here
http://hawthornevalley.forumotion.com/
and on the main Half blood site.

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